The Shrine

<div style='font: 9pt "copperplate gothic light"; text-align: left; '>For those who are interested, Rusty Hard Drive starts tomorrow.  Just thought I would let you know.</div>

<div style='font: 10pt "EngraversGothic BT", "Copperplate Gothic Light", "Century Gothic"; text-align: left; '>For the record, I really didn't understand the first comic you put up.</div>

<div style='font: 11pt Dominion; text-align: left; '>neither did I but I was told I was in the minority</div>

<div style='font: 9pt "copperplate gothic light"; text-align: left; '>That was just a teaser ment to play off of the character personality quirks a little bit.  The actual premise of the story will be mostly explained in the first 2 or 3 strips.</div>

<div style='font: 9pt "copperplate gothic light"; text-align: left; '>Well its up.  Note that this is just starting to describe what is going on.  By the end of the week, I will have the premise set.  Anyway, opinions?</div>

<div style='font: 12pt "Cooper Black"; text-align: left; '>...there may be too many characters and you should probably have made up your own character game-looking 'sprites'. When i see Edgar i expect him to be called Edgar and act like Edgar but neither will be true in your cartoon. Of course i'll get over that feeling soon and will adopt your versions of him soon enough so the problem might just be me.

You did well on the first cartoon, it explains stuff and adds a funny punchline. Some strips try to be too funny and have mulitple jokes in one cartoon which i think is not the way to go. A little dialog and one joke is all that is needed and you hit that great. Maybe this will be different in future cartoons, but all 4 cells have the same scene (just different talking boxes). You need to mix up the look of each box, have them turn to look at the one talking or something minute like that. Also, i hope you have tons of versions of each character because having them always in the same position may get old fast.

All in all, fantastic job, i look forward to the updates!</div>

<div style='font: 9pt "copperplate gothic light"; text-align: left; '>That is only gonig to be true for whenever they are in the hubworld. See the problem with doing too much movement is well, I have 11 sprites for this comic. As you can see, its a little crowded. As a result after the first adventure we will be constantly breaking up into diffrent groups of 3 or 4. That way I can have the diffrent characters interact with each other, and yet still have room for dialouge and scenery.

See the difficult thing is that, this is going to be a fairly long story, but I still have to have each strip have an difinitive ending point. Now not every strip will necessarily be funny, but I am going to do my best to add a punchline, or at least a definitive closign point at the end of every strip.</div>